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Instructions: because deviantART hates writers, you'll have to click the download button to view the file as a pdf. From there I highly recommend you copy all the text (ctrl+a) and copy the text into word. But I'm generally not too partial to this pdf format, and I've become quite fond of the "full screen reading" option at the bottom right of Word 2007 ;)

Anyway, on to the important stuff! I really, really, really would love any and all critiques. This has been a project of mine for the past three years and, with the help of my enduring friends, it has come this far. Alas, I'm too a point that I can no longer, with respect for those beloved friends, bug them to read another draft.

I ask only that you speak your mind. But if you are stuck on something to say, my hope of this preview is as follows:
There are four chapters of twenty-one total posted. The chapters are larger than some may be accustomed, though you'll notice a system of two line breaks for scene changes or one for time displacement. Imagine reading through these chapters in a bookstore or a library: are you sold? would you consider what you just read worthy of further attention or did you lose interest? If so, where?

If you don't like being public with a comment, notes are more than welcome.

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:iconpainttheskyred:
Harrow is very dreamy. <3 I love his personality. Tis very hot. Wonderful write, I love the style of it. Excellant job. I didn't loose attention at all, I just only hope that when you publish this I get a signed copy mailed to me. ;D

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Coffee = orgasm for the mouth.
:iconsaporousserenade:
Haha, I must confess that's the first time I've heard the word 'dreamy' used from anyone's character analysis of Harrow. Most admiration, from the women particularly, so far, has been for Scarlet. I'm glad you approve of him, and especially glad that you approve of my style :D
And duh, Kara! I promise <3

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As a matter of personal respect I have never quoted anyone I did not think was more clever than myself which has, until today, made me seem very foolish.
:iconpainttheskyred:
Scarlet is like a mother hen at the end. Tutting and what not. Harrow=yummy. (Don't tell my boyfriend that.) Yay! <3

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Coffee = orgasm for the mouth.
:iconsaporousserenade:
Hahaha, oh Kara...
You have an opinion that should always be sought :P

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As a matter of personal respect I have never quoted anyone I did not think was more clever than myself which has, until today, made me seem very foolish.

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